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Hello, dear friends! I'm looking for an opinion from you all. The last chapter of my T/C series involves a one-sided telephone conversation, and I'm not quite sure how to depict it. Would you let me know what you think?


In an earlier chapter I got around it by having reactions interspered, but I don't want to do that this time around; I just want the one-sided quotes of conversation.

Here are the options I see.

1. Have the character's responses just be separate lines of dialog to imply conversation, like this:

"Yes, I agree."

"No, I don't see what you mean."

"Are you sure?"

But that makes it look like a conversation between two people.

2. Have the conversation captured in one set of quotes with the responses divided by my old arch-enemy, the ellipsis, like this:

"Yes, I agree... No, I don't see what you mean... Are you sure?"

If I do that, do I capitalize the beginning of each new thought as in the example?

3. Same as #2, but using periods instead of the ellipsis, like this:

"Yes, I agree. No, I don't see what you mean. Are you sure?"

But that makes it look like one complete speech by the character.

4. Same as #1, but using the ellipsis instead of periods, like this:

"Yes, I agree..."

"No, I don't see what you mean..."

"Are you sure?"

That sort of feels right, but doesn't appeal much to my eye.

5. Any other suggestions anyone might care to offer.

You do realize, I hope, that I feel incredibly, totally geeky for asking this! But I am curious.

Thanks for whatever thought you care to offer. Even if it's just to tell me I'm an incredible, total geek. Hee! :D

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msliz4857
Mar. 18th, 2007 03:00 am (UTC)
Aw, you are about the best ego booster a girl could ever ask for! Where you ever a cheerleader? :D

I think next semester I shall offer to teach a writing class: "The Fangirl's Guide to Writing Smex" alternately titled "Gay Porn: How to Take Your Fanfic Over the Rainbow"

Hee! :)
skyblue_reverie
Mar. 18th, 2007 03:53 pm (UTC)
A cheerleader? Eek! Heaven forbid! :P

Haha! That would make a great class. :D